Friday Fictioneers #11 – A New Routine

Copyright -Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

Copyright -Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

Friday Fictioneers is a weekly flash fiction challenge to create a 100 word story based on a photo prompt and then receive as well as share feedback with writers from around the world. Approx 100 submissions are entered every week.

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A New Routine

(Word Count: 100)

She disappeared behind closing elevator doors. Again David took the stairs, two and three at a time.

He retrieved the squirt-top bottle from his gym bag – dowsing his face and neck with ice cold water.  Next the Binaca spray.  Clumsily missing his opened mouth – it burned like mace in his right eye.

In the lobby – a hand towel masked his tearing eye while the other focused on “the mystery girl from 6A”.

They exchanged smiles.

Once the elevator doors closed for him, David finally exhaled and leaned against the hand rail. This new workout routine may be getting results already!

26 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers #11 – A New Routine

  1. This is great fun! I love the “new workout routine” and wish David the best in his attempts at wooing the “mystery girl.” Nice work.

    Marie Gail

  2. I think an exercise book is next, “How to Get in Shape and Find a Girlfriend.” 🙂 Hopefully he’ll keep his eyes clear next time. It’s too early in the relationship to shed tears. This was an enjoyable POV. The grammar side of me is curious why you went with three hyphens rather than simple commas.


  3. Well-written and humorous story. Maybe he should find out a little more somehow about the new girl before he half kills himself. She might already have a jealous boyfriend who does more than spray Binaca in his eye. 🙂

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