Copyright -Rochelle Wisoff-Fields
Friday Fictioneers is a weekly flash fiction challenge to create a 100 word story based on a photo prompt and then receive as well as share feedback with writers from around the world. Approx 100 submissions are entered every week.
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A New Routine
(Word Count: 100)
She disappeared behind closing elevator doors. Again David took the stairs, two and three at a time.
He retrieved the squirt-top bottle from his gym bag – dowsing his face and neck with ice cold water. Next the Binaca spray. Clumsily missing his opened mouth – it burned like mace in his right eye.
In the lobby – a hand towel masked his tearing eye while the other focused on “the mystery girl from 6A”.
They exchanged smiles.
Once the elevator doors closed for him, David finally exhaled and leaned against the hand rail. This new workout routine may be getting results already!
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This is great fun! I love the “new workout routine” and wish David the best in his attempts at wooing the “mystery girl.” Nice work.
Cheers!
Marie Gail
🙂 Thanks MG! I now wonder if David even makes it to a gym or if it’s all for show lol
I’ve been obsessed lately with improving action scenes by avoiding lines like “his/her heart raced” and instead show it in a believable way
I like the way I see your writing evolve here. Keep up the good work.
Now that’s what I call dedication. Nicely done.
Greatly appreciated Sandra!
Well he’s an eye sore because of his efforts 🙂 Thanks for reading and commenting! Thanks for reading and commenting
I hope all his hard work pays off!
Me too! Thanks for reading and commenting
Dear BA,
Not sure about his breath but I’m sure his eye smells very nice. I enjoyed your story and his dedication to attracting the girl.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Oh, ow if it feels like mace in his eyes. I hope it’s just water next time. And yes, I hope it pays off, too. This was fun!
Thanks for reading and commenting Amy! Every week of FF I look at the picture and think…oh well…I’ll never come up with anything. Glad you enjoyed!
Good story and that spray would kill his eye. Poor guy, but I hope he gets the girl in the end. Great writing! Nan
Thanks so much for reading and commenting Nan!
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Wow many thanks Alex! Very much appreciated.
Ah a workout that works out.. hope for success..
Right like “what doesn’t kill you makes you stronger” lol
I think an exercise book is next, “How to Get in Shape and Find a Girlfriend.” 🙂 Hopefully he’ll keep his eyes clear next time. It’s too early in the relationship to shed tears. This was an enjoyable POV. The grammar side of me is curious why you went with three hyphens rather than simple commas.
janet
Lol Janet! Normally I would use commas but thought the hyphens would add more emphasis.
Well-written and humorous story. Maybe he should find out a little more somehow about the new girl before he half kills himself. She might already have a jealous boyfriend who does more than spray Binaca in his eye. 🙂
Lol very true but then again love is blind!
Ha!ha!What a cute take on the prompt BA-enjoyed it:-)
Thanks as alway atrm61! I’m trying to avoid the darker subject matter in FF and still keep things interesting.
:-)Good for you-for the life of me I cannot keep my dark evil mind away from latching on to most of my stories,lol!
No worries! I still enjoy reading and writing that style too.
🙂